Collaboratively we wrote and edited a piece about the show. The UNDERLINED text shows the original piece. We then edited it to add extra information.

We are learning to add extra information to our stories.

We All of Room Seven all went to a drumming Show on Tuesday in the hall at Bucklands Beach Primary School. It The drums were was really loud. We got to use one a drum that looked like a vase. We all got to sit next to a one of these drums. You needed $4 to get your own drum. The people’s that made the music and ran the show names were named Johnny and Lucy. There was an instrument that they called Wilson and he made music.

Collaboratively by Room 7.

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